One Spooky halloween night 4 friends went trick or treating Zoe the youngest was walking ahead Sandra, Lucinda and Shaye told her to slow down she didn't listen suddenly she disappeared Sandra got worried and ran after her she disappeared into the darkness.
Shaye and Lucinda kept trick or treating they thought that they were just being silly until we finished trick or treating we heard gunshots we ran to see what had happened. In shock me an Lucinda saw Zoe and Sandra DEAD! On the ground we had to get out of there!!!
Shaye and Lucinda kept trick or treating they thought that they were just being silly until we finished trick or treating we heard gunshots we ran to see what had happened. In shock me an Lucinda saw Zoe and Sandra DEAD! On the ground we had to get out of there!!!
Hi Grace!
ReplyDeleteI really liked how spooky your Halloween story is. It is really shocking if you find your friends dead when they already disappeared. Maybe next time you can add more paragraphs and proof read your work before posting it. Anticipating for part two!
Hello Grace,
ReplyDeleteI think your story about Halloween is very creative. I think it is cool how you used your friends as characters in your story. Did you know that the origins of Halloween were in Europe when they dressed up in animal skins to worship their Gods. The Jacko lantern was originally made from turnips and other veges before the tradition moved to the USA where pumpkins were more common. I also like the plot twist where Zoe and Sandra were found dead. Next time you could space out your ideas and use emotive language.
Hello Rheanna
Deletethank you for the feedback nice to hear that you like my story and i will keep that in mined for next time
Grace